For my outline, overall I hope to use visual, linguistic, spatial and auditory in my essay. It will have lyrics to songs, pictures, short videos and the paragraphs may have some things bolded or organized in a different fashion than usual. Here’s my super long, thought out, iffy outline!
*Not entirely sure about the order of every paragraph*
- Art is beautiful because reassures us of the normality of pain by comforting us when we are suffering.
-Art makes us less lonely: “Like putting on a sad piece of music, somber works of art, don’t have to depress us rather they can give us the welcome feeling that pain is part of the human condition.”
-Pick one song (not sure which one): Sun Rays by Harbor and Home or la song by Lewis Watson
“Sun rays, why did you fall
Far from it all.
Packed your bags and ran away
Oh, come back sun rays.”
OR
“I’ve been washed away
With everything I’ve ever known
I loved you to your veins
So how come I’m alone?”
*I will provide an analysis of the quote and how this suffering relates to the lyrics of the song. This specific type of suffering is heartbreak. Music is there to comfort us, to assure us that we are not alone in this. We are not the only ones who are suffering.*
-Possibly add song about the son project that Aaron & Stephen did
-Art in Children’s Hospital–> Liv’s project: provide pictures from her project and discuss another type of suffering which is physical/mental/emotional. These pictures helped Liv’s specific friend to not focus on the pain that was inside and instead use art to comfort her. I will incorporate these pictures inside of the text, referencing certain ones.
-Armstrong’s essay: “If we want to understand beauty, we can’t just talk about the things we find beautiful. We have to talk about our lives.” — Directly relates to someone’s personal experiences with suffering whether it is a illness or heartbreak. Everyone suffers and can turn to art to help them cope/comfort. —“Comfort and ease struggle against a sense of duty and responsibility.”—Sometimes it’s okay to have more of a sense drive because you need to focus on bettering yourself when you are suffering. Sometimes you need contact and possession to get over a rough patch in your life. —True beauty comes from the inside and how it impacts YOU and YOUR life. —Mention the sense drive
2) Art teaches us that true beauty comes from within. —mentioning and speaking to both drives & how they need to be balanced
-“If we want to understand beauty, we can’t just talk about the tings we find beautiful. We have to talk about our lives.” (2)
-“If the sense drive dominates, we become brutish and superficial. If the form drive dominates, we become dry and callous. We need the two to interact harmoniously in order to see the role that beauty can play in our lives.” (3)
-“And indeed, many loathsome people own beautiful things, and the possession of these objects does not seem to make them more humane or especially gracious.” (5)
-“Like many people today, Schiller worried that beauty was too connected to social status.” (5)
-Consider talking to someone—the inside is what matters, not the outside. (Inserting picture of an approachable looking person vs a not so looking approachable person–explain how the grouchy looking one could be extremely nice but you wouldn’t know until you met them. You have to get to know them first to learn about their true personality.)
3) Art helps us to appreciate the little things in life.
-Quotes from the “Art Helps Us Appreciate Stuff”— “Art returns glamour to its rightful place, highlighting what’s genuinely worth appreciating.” // “The media is constantly giving us hints about what’s glamorous and important.”
-Eric’s example of his own photography— appreciation of his own art, what he likes to do
-Anthony’s example of cathedrals and how they amaze him when they may not amaze anyone else
-My own example of mountains & sunsets (incorporate things in my little town that I love)
*Brings you back to earth and what the earth offers you. Art is in specifically nature and the nature that surrounds us that we often take advantage of because it is so available to us*
I like how you have so many different options that you are considering using in your essay. I think by giving yourself a lot of sources will strengthen your arguments and make your claims so much stronger. I think that by adding the personal touches and linking things to your own life and making things personal is a good idea. for example when you mentioned putting pictures from your town. I think that adding pictures of people who you find to be approachable would be a cool idea and very unique. It not only would bring what you believe into it, but you can also tie it into what Armstrong believes. Overall I think you have a strong outline filled with a lot of great ideas. Excited to see what your rough draft looks like! 🙂
Why hello Hannah! While reading your outline, Iove how you incorporate different choices you may be using, for it gives you the flexibility to go back and pick which ever one goes better with your essay. Even when you are revising, this is important to remember for you can easily re-choose one if it fits better at the end! I loved all of the different peer examples you will be using, and think this will make your essay very strong as you have a variety of examples you are pulling from the class. Not only that, but even the quotes from the readings we have done in class are well written. This is something I need to personally work on, but you did an amazing job narrowing down your choices for the quotes you may use, well done! I also believe your outline is well organized as you specifically have what you will write in one paragraph and then the next. Definitely remember to put in your personal experiences because you have some words of wisdom you could definitely share to make your essay hit the heart harder. Hannah well done, you’re going to go far in this essay!
Hannah,
You do have a lot of balls in the air here. Consider brainstorming connections using our cluster prewriting strategy (or the list version, if you prefer). I liked the idea of your experience of beauty acting as the cohesive glue, but this may be extra challenging. I’ll give you more feedback, as I read your paper! Keep going. You’ve got this!
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